Aloft

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Three days from the sea lies the city of Gezze.

Gezze has no roads, no alleys, no footpaths. The buildings are squeezed one beside the other, so close together that the sunlight does not reach the ground floors of the homes. The citizens, therefore, do not keep company in the parlors down below, dusk-filled even at noon, but instead hold court on the rooftops.

I found myself lost in a maze of houses, passing from room to room in search of open air, until I was certain I’d never again see the sun.

The baker’s daughter found me, gasping for breath in an empty room. She took me to her father’s roof and pulled me up onto the ledge as I gulped in great mouthfuls of sky.

“We shun the ground, hoping the gods will see and grant us flight.”

She stepped lightly, from her father’s roof to the next, less than a man’s width away.

Then she turned and beckoned to me.

But fear of falling kept me from crossing even such a thin chasm. I left her there, her arms like outstretched wings, and returned to the earth.

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  1. Avatar falconesse

    This is a bit rough, but I wanted to get it out of my head before I go away for the weekend. Chances are I’ll be tweaking it when I get home in a few days.

  2. Avatar jesteram

    So glad you joined the journey. This is beautiful, especially the ideas of flight you play with at the end.

    So many of these stops are turning into scenes of heartache!

  3. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    “We shun the ground, hoping the gods will see and grant us flight.”
    who the f#$@ are you this is like cheesecake to a fat girl 5 pencils

  4. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    hey no offense fat girls i love ya

  5. Avatar Jessica Cahill

    MJY…you kill me. Srsly…

    Falconesse, I love how this city is a direct opposite of Jesteram’s…intended or not, and how already the denizens seem to be closer to their gift of flight. Beautiful.

  6. Avatar wordwill

    Really lovely. You’ve done a great job of packing a lot in here without feeling rushed. We got from a wide view to a close view to some action and character all in a thousand characters. Nice.

  7. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Nice tragic turn for the traveler. Again, and like the other great ones in this series, I find myself left to wonder if the traveler is close-minded or if the denizens are fools. Really liking the ambiguity.

  8. Avatar OrangeOreos (LoA)

    I have to say that I loved how the girl is described as such a light, bird-like person, what with her stepping lightly and arms outstretched. Definitely an intriguing story!

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