Closer

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Lightning.
One one-thousand, two one-thousand, three one-thousand, four -
Thunder.
Storms getting closer. Three, four miles.
I loved you Julia. Your wild eyes, your hot mouth and your dirty mind. I gave you everything. You took it greedily. All I wanted was for you to keep taking all that I could give and I would have been happy. Everything changed when Sean arrived. You made such a perfect couple. It was fate, you said.
Perhaps.
Lightning.
One one-thousand, two-
Thunder.
Much closer, just a mile or so.
I can feel the wind getting stronger, colder.
You can’t leave me, I said.
I already have, you said.
Perhaps.
Lightning.
One.
Thunder.
The storm is here and as I look down at the freshly dug earth, I wonder if it will rain. Rain will wash away my footprints, but may reveal that mouth, now quite cold, one more time.
Lightning.
Thunder.
The wind practically a gale.
I start walking toward town.
Toward Sean.
Thunder.

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  1. Avatar Wyatt Aapr LoA

    Very ominous without spelling it out for us. Very well crafted. Good job.

  2. Avatar LaraLustre

    Oooh lovely! Like the transition from storm to subject, love the hot/cold mouth, so carefully and beautifully done ..

  3. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    creepy. makes me wonder what fate is in store for Sean.

  4. Avatar The Author Formerly Known as Krulltar

    wonderful subtle reveal. I love how you intertwined it with the storm

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