Just For 1 Minute

Avatar Author: Mr. Reeses I'm a human being that likes to write down the romance he wishes he had, the experiences that happen to him all the time, the mistakes that haunts him and the choices that make him, human. I love ficlets, that was my ... Read Bio

He strummed his guitar to the beat of his foot.
He sang his heart out to the four walls of his room,
Trying to come up with the best lyrics he could to impress her.
Allowing his melodies of the guitar to become in sync with his passion of love for her.
He was completely out of her league,
If he could just grab her attention just for these couple of minutes,
He could give her the world without even touching her.
He could love her the most then anyone at that second.
He could make love to her on the surface of his eighth notes and sharp major chords.
He could allow her to peacefully sleep on his ballad of a melody.
Those four walls took in his emotions and tears of a perfect woman he called “Brandi”
He sung to those walls as if he was being judged.
But if he only knew, the door was slightly cracked
And Brandi was listening to his beautiful sounds,
Slowly being hypnotized by his voice
She cried as his voiced echoed the hallways
When his song ended,
He opened the door to find her laying unconscious…

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  1. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    THE beat of his foot baby

  2. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    Oh my gawd this was good but i was listening to tiny dancer when I read it and now i need to see the shrink.

  3. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    This is brilliant i love it, i think it is just the balls. i love it.

  4. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    nice progression.

  5. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    To the beat of his foot
    wouldn’t she be out of his league? or is he so Uber, that she would be so flattered?? like some super rocker..
    he could lever her more than anyone
    as if he were being judged
    slowly being hypnotized
    as his voice echoed
    was she asleep from the melodies, exhausted from crying for his love?

    if you have room, plz make these past tense, it makes your wonderful poem that much more epic. :)

    My fav line : “He could make love to her on the surface of his eighth notes and sharp major chords.” That is raw awesomeness!

  6. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    I read it, but didn’t get it. A lot of little grammar things wound up distracting to me at least, or maybe it’s just that I have no musical talent so I can’t relate or something. I think the thought and idea here are good, but the execution got in the way.

  7. Avatar El Fe del Oro

    Was she in the room with him when he was playing or was she behind the door?

  8. Avatar El Fe del Oro

    I think that it was pretty good and I like how the guy of the story wanted to capture her love with music.

  9. Avatar Mr. Reeses

    Thank you, I made all the necessary corrections, to make it better. Thanks Mighty Joe, Pyropunk, THX, Lady Ray & Elsha!

    I was thinking she was unconscious because his song hypnotized her into a sleep that she’s been yearning for… and when she wakes up, she would wake up in his arms…or you could finish they story… Thanks for your comments!!!

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