The Marionette's Revenge

Avatar Author: Stovohobo _Great stories happen to those who can tell them._ -Ira Glass, although he attributed it to Anonymous. If you comment my stuff, please be as nit-picky as necessary. I crave constructive criticism. Also alliteration.... Read Bio

She twiddled fingers
and rasped her voice
to rid his brain
of thought of choice.

Her throat, the womb
that knit her lies;
to drain disguise—

Dipping line,
downward spin—
She made him careless,
drowned in gin.

Still, he hid
the wedding ring,
a tiny but
portentous thing

And twice his wife
awoke to dread—
rumpled sheets
and lonely bed.

She watched her husband
come home to find
no suspicion,
and she was blind.

So he was soothed,
clean getaway;
free to lie
another day.

But doting wife,
ever wary,
an actress to
the man she married,

elated when
all signs converged
at Vixen’s den.
She armed herself
with kitchen knife
and knocked upon
the Devil’s door.

Handle turned,
door opened wide,
and Adult’ress thrust
down to the floor.

Blade at throat,
high heels flew
punctured skin
and lines of red

Snarls and gasps—
a shotgun blew—
the husband stood,
the Vixen dead.

And in the space
where it did cling,
was tiny, golden
wedding ring.

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  1. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    this so good it isnt funny this is really brilliant. i mean really brilliant. This is the fate of many a trubador.
    I wish i had more pencils

  2. Avatar Elisabeth L. Davis(LoA)

    And, of course, poetic.

  3. Avatar Marli

    You certainly have a way with words Stovo.. not sure if amniocentesis is in the right context though.

  4. Avatar gĀ²LaPianistaIrlandesa

    It all just works… the meter, the visuals, the whole thing. It just coalesces, it all just works.

  5. Avatar StudMuffin (LoA)

    I love it.
    Like seriously, this blows anything I’ve ever written out of the water.

  6. Avatar Twyst

    very nice.

  7. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    great work! The husband chose to aid his wife, huh? I guess she really loved him and he realized that..

  8. Avatar OrangeOreos (LoA)

    Crazy man! When I read the title, I thought it was going to be something about Pinocchio taking his revenge on Geppetto or somethin’. :D

  9. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Tragic and a really fun read. Nice voice to it, even if I got a little lost in places.