When the pawn hits the floor…

Avatar Author: Rachel Addison Miller Read Bio

It doesn’t shatter. The player is surprised; the piece appears to be made of bone. He expected a satisfying mess for his efforts. It is no King or Queen…just a piece of little value. Expendable, replaceable.

He is unaware that the pawn is the one piece on the board that isn’t what it seems. It was fashioned lovingly of steel, forged and refined by hands keenly aware of the need to make it unbreakable. The smooth ivory is only a veneer.

Though presumed to be ignorant, the pawn knows what the player does not. He plays against himself, and thus fancies that he is destined to win. In truth, he is destined to play forever – always feeling the sting of loss.

He searches with increasing desperation for the pawn, needing it to complete his set so that he may try to recover his losses from his ruthless opponent. From himself.

But it has rolled away, and he can’t find it anywhere.

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  1. Avatar Rachel Addison Miller

    So, first post/challenge and I already have ignored the rules. I used an album title, not cover: Fiona Apple’s “When the Pawn Hits the Floor.”
    I think she would approve.

  2. Avatar DoItForScience

    Ivory veneers on steel, that’s a patient craftsman! I like the story, even if I can’t tease out the deeper meaning.

  3. Avatar Coccinella

    Poor player. Woe betide the player that underestimates the value of his pawns.

  4. Avatar Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

    Wow… I really enjoyed this! Very well written!

    And you thought I’d consider it rubbish?

    You must have a screw loose!

    Very well done!

  5. Avatar emily.ruth

    i LOVE this concept! very entertaining to read. :)

  6. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    If you replace the pawn with “god” and the player with “man” you get a metaphorical philosophical statement.

    “Though presumed to be ignorant, the pawn knows what the player does not. He plays against himself, and thus fancies that he is destined to win. In truth, he is destined to play forever – always feeling the sting of loss.”

    So there, Science. :P

  7. Avatar J. Rein B.

    I would just like to comment that, on searching this album on Google (to know what it was), your story was the first hit.

    I’d say good job on topping Google. :D
    Oh, and the story was very nice, too.
    Pawns are always so underrated. XD

  8. Avatar Rachel Addison Miller

    Wow…that’s crazy about Google! I feel special. :-)

  9. Avatar Ath

    Awesome story. Well written. It really paints the scene.

  10. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    This story was nominated for the ficly book.