The Chosen

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C’h’caaa surveyed the beauty of each contestant. There were strength, intelligence, love, power, and so many other traits present, yet there was no clear answer. Each individual was beautiful in its own way…

C’h’caaa turned to face the crowd, a worried look in its eyes. It was then that it saw its champion.

“I have decided,” it said. “In this crowd shines a beauty so bright, so complete, that no others can compare.” It turned its many eyes to focus on a young, half-elven girl, no more than twelve human years old. “You, step forward.”

The girl looked up at her mother, who nodded. She let go of her mother’s hand and stepped forward, timidly.

The crowd was shocked. How could this girl, a mutt, be the most beautiful?

“This girl has within her the potential to shine with all the forms of beauty shown before you. Physical beauty, intelligence, agility, love, cunning… She may someday posses them all. I see her destiny, and her choices shall define her true beauty.”

If only she knew, C’h’caaa thought.

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  1. Avatar Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

    Of course, I left it open for a sequel… What is the destiny of this young half-elf? What did the beholder really see of her future?

    Will the beholder play a part in the child’s future, or is it simply a harbinger of the girl’s potential fate?

  2. Avatar Match

    I like it! I’m tempted to write a sequel, but knowing me she’ll die a plastic surgery overdoser, a drug-addled harridan, who’s once-powerful destiny was ruined by winning a beauty contest. So I’ll leave the slot for someone with a brighter tale :)

  3. Avatar Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

    Zydrate comes in a little glass vial.

    A little glass vial?

    A little glass vial. And the little glass vial fits into the gun like a battery.

    And the gun goes of when it’s pressed against your anatomy…

  4. Avatar Spageti

    Quite the rivetin’ story ye got goin’ here! I hope me sequel can live up to the high standards set by this eloquent mastermind writer fellow!

  5. Avatar April Raines

    I like how you went outside the contests. Also, the word ‘mutt’ to describe a half-elf – beauty! :)

    Very different from where I would have gone, I think – I think I’d’ve gone darker. But that’s the beauty of Ficly!

  6. Avatar Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

    I’d love to see how you’d have sequeled it!

  7. Avatar Rachel Addison Miller

    Match, I’d like to read your sequel, dark as it may be!

    I like the concept that the “mutt” has the potential of so many beauties. But she can’t be perfect – so what path will she take? Hm…

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