Spiral whirlpool

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A spiral, a whirlpool. As as you swirl nearer and nearer the center, your senses become disoriented. You cannot pick out the pieces of the landscape around you to give you your bearings. Perspective fractures, and logical connections go with it. Fear, doubt, rage swirl into your disintegrating self, becoming part of you as you become part of them.

Vaguely, you sense there are others around the whirlpool, calling to you…but you cannot see them. A hand may flash by as you’re whipped around, but it is gone too quickly to catch. Your struggle has only made its current stronger.

You take a deep breath…and allow yourself to go under. What will you find on the other side, you wonder?

You decide: You’re no longer afraid to find out.

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  1. Avatar Rachel Addison Miller

    Can’t tell if I like this…too early in the AM. :)

  2. Avatar `spacetowrite

    i like this.

  3. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    It’s nice and works very well as metaphor or allegory. And it reminds me of a cartoon I watched when I was younger, I think called ‘Water Babies’. But I might have the title wrong.

  4. Avatar Ath

    I really like your use of words in everything you have posted. Great job.

  5. Avatar Krulltar

    my dark and twisted muse of tragedy is a bit miffed at the sunny-side up fateful acceptance, but what does she know anyway. If she had her way, I would be writing Die Hard Fan Fiction. So, I liked it. It had a bunnies playing in daisies sort of feel to it. I don’t know if any of that made sense, but that’s my 5 pencil comment. Take it or leave it.

  6. Avatar Rachel Addison Miller

    Thanks for the comments everyone. :)

    Regarding the fateful acceptance, I’ll quote Joseph Conrad:
    “In the destructive element immerse.”

  7. Avatar Krulltar

    oh, now that puts this in a wonderful new light that I hadn’t thought about.

  8. Toonrmicon Robotech_Master

    An interesting story. Seemingly unrelated to the one that came before, except thematically. The first one was more kind of abstract, but this is…I guess abstract in a different way. Not playing games with word sounds, but taking the idea of a whirlpool and making it symbolic. Interesting.

  9. Avatar Rachel Addison Miller

    True…though I’m not sure how it could have related except for thematically. It’s not a story so there are no characters, plot, etc. More of a “relation” than a sequel, I guess.

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