Quick Thinking

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They both gave me questioning looks.

“Search him.” one said.

Just then one of their cellphones rang.

“Huh…? How…. I’ll be right there.” my captor barked into the phone.
“Watch the kid, the bitch escaped.” he said grinning.
“Don’t you dare call her a bitch!” I screamed at him.

He walked up to me grinning, he then struck me with his pistol and ordered the other man to handcuff me to a pipe.

After I regained my sight, I looked over to see one of my captors sitting smoking a cigarette reading a magazine. I looked for means of escape. I looked up at the pipe above me and noticed a knob. I needed to get him to come over to me.

“Hey i’m gonna use my tracking device and call the F.B.I.” I said.

He got up slowly and walked over toward me as he did I managed to break the knob which unleashed a powerful burst of hot steam onto his face. He screamed in pain as he repelled I tripped him over my legs and he fell onto the group dead. I managed to get his key ring and began to struggle to free myself.

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    whoa, how long was he out? hmm, so one guy went after Mom..

    (note: this sentence is awkward"He screamed in pain as he repelled I tripped him over my legs and he fell onto the group dead.")

  2. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    wait wait, and the caller, who went after her too… and she was standing outside the door…

  3. Avatar illusionistic

    I guess the mother is smarter than we were guessing :)

  4. Avatar SJHundak/SJWilling

    Nice sequel, got caught out for a second with the type pip where it should have been pipe, and would question the use of repelled “as he repelled” seems to indicate he’s repelling the steam.

    “as the steam repelled him” would work better is it indicates the steam is winning.

    Nice workaround though, and thoughtful plot.


  5. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    one down, how many to go?

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