The Five Steps (Part II)

Avatar Author: Mockingbird I once got a fortune cookie that said "you like to use your imagination". I also had a fortune cookie tell me I was selfish. I was offended until I got distracted by my friends offer to the last egg roll. Which was de... Read Bio

My whole body is like a cave. Empty and full of nothing. This new lonely hurts so bad it feels like someone is squeezing my body in their hand until I ooze out between their fingers and become a puddle on the floor. And then they step on me. I feel like a pin ball between cement bricks. That’s how I am without you. Only someone so great could cause so much pain when they’ve passed. I could only wish to be like you. But I will not let go. I cannot let go. But my love for you is deeper than those pains. And though your eternal sleep will now always be my eternal ach, I will always be daddy’s little girl. She’s just been forced to grow up. But she will always love you. 24/7. 365. 366 (on leap years).

(Because sometimes, knowing what you had while you had it, hurts more than the ignorince of not knowing until its gone. If only because youll actually know what you will never get back instead of only dreaming about what could have been.)

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Good point at the end, in parenthesis.
    Maybe you should title these with the five steps themselves, or after a semicolon.
    “Only someone so great could cause so much pain when they’ve passed” beautiful statement of truth.
    (spelling ache, ignorance, you’ll)
    I’m sorry if this is true, I hope you find some solace and have some great friends to rely upon.

  2. Avatar Mockingbird

    Thanks for pointing out my spelling mistakes!!! Like I said, Im horrible at correcting my own work. And this all was kind of one big piece, word vomit if you will, that i got too lazy to edit down to the appropriate size so I just make it two pieces. I should probably edit it and make it all one though. Thanks!!!

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