Good horror stream of consciousness piece, although it starts to weaken in the last third – considering that there was a really interesting, intriguing ambiguity to most of it, the last paragraph was a little cliched… Good, could be REALLY good if tweaked :)

Thanks for the feedback! I have to agree with you about the ending; I had a hard time figuring out how to wrap the story up. I’ll probably take another crack at it again in the future, either as a sequel or new project.

Suspenseful, bu I agree, the suspense quickly died down.