nice fitting tribute to the challenge, with great describtions. minor edit: 2nd to last sentence is convaluted and needs a re-write.

Repaired.

Good catch.

thanks :)

Love not only the in-the-moment narration which felt very authentic and effective but also the classic element of folklore—functionality. The stories aren’t just stories. They have a purpose in the telling, in this case giving campers one more thing to think about before misbehaving. Very fun.

you just made up one creepy legend, and took it to one step further in having the boy fret over it. :) or did you make it up?

Excellent… I love this. One thing to consider: the narrator’s voice seems much more authentic at the end than when he’s retelling the legend. I love his sound at the end — you might want to consider rewriting the first part to have it match.

nice. I love the whole legend, ghost thing. The ending was cool. He just closes his eyes and prayed. It’s really cool. =)

ITS AWESOME