Very exciting with just a bit of your premise/fantasy material thrown in. Nicely written and formatted, thank goodness (been reading a lot of less than stellar ficlies lately).

umm, I’ll take that compliment, but I hope none of those authors feel convicted… That would weigh on my conscience. :)

You’re NaNoing, Elsha? Add me as a buddy, please! Loving this excerpt.

alright nancy, you are now my nano buddy, I also made this ficly my nano excerpt, and included a short synopsis. :)

This is a fast paced piece Elsha and I really like the stand alone feel. Just enough tit bits to get me to want to read more though.

I have no idea if I got the premise right, or even which one was the aurist and which one the shield, but I took a stab at a sequel anyway cause it came to me.
Good luck on nanowrimo, and sorry my first comment was a negative compliment. I was having a rough day.

A little confused on whats a NaNo? Other than that, great story!

Great read.

@ Mr.Gabriel NaNoWriMo is a writing challenge. check out nanowrimo.org for details. :)

Very nice….

this was very ficlyrific i loved the way it was a small portion yet it passes the stand alone test.