Interesting sequel. Alot of dialogue, but you might want to descirbe this house more, just to create a more eerie scene. Again, a few mistakes. After Mat speaks the first time, you changed from past tense to present tense, back to past tense. Also when it says “and then they all huddle,” should be huddled
Interesting sequel. Alot of dialogue, but you might want to descirbe this house more, just to create a more eerie scene.
Again, a few mistakes. After Mat speaks the first time, you changed from past tense to present tense, back to past tense.
Also when it says “and then they all huddle,” should be huddled
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