I love this! I love how you started it off describing her shoes. Sounds like there’s a lot of drama to unfold.

Lovely moment, and I like the layers to the character. The second to last paragraph felt a bit jumbled and a bit hard to follow.

i thought the second paragraph was easy to follow. i loved the story. it was sweet..

Oh please write more!

hmm i agree about confusing. But it’s cute and good.