I like the topic and enjoy your writing style, but IMHO this is coming across as a Disney version of Showgirls. The names are too common (very few go by stacie or mary or karen, ect) and there’s no one doing blow backstage.

I love it! Do continue!

I kind of agree with Krulltar, a lot of strippers go by stage names and drugs are often present. idk from personal experience tho lol but I’d think there would be at least one girl taking a handfull of painkillers to take the edge off of her nerves. Then there’s usually a woman who’s in her late 30s or early 40s, still stripping and the young’ins usually pity her.

It just needs a dash of drama :)

Thanks for the suggestions and i’ll be sure to add more drama in the next sequel.

Thanks Bart!

& its your. (: Haha, just to let you know.

Yeah, it’s common practice for strippers to have stage names, it is more unusual to NOT have one, because of the Creep factor in strip club clientelle. And so far in my experiences, every single stripper is introduced, and generally with superlatives from the DJ too. And what Raegan said is spot on too.

Once again, the criticism is appreciated, but this is a fiction strip club, in a fiction town, in a fiction world, in someone’s fiction life.

Its illegal for teenagers to join strip clubs or do prono, but in Make Believe World all rules to the real world are be thrown away.

So I havent been to a strip club ever in my life. I dont know exactly how they work, but using my imagination I tried my best.

Ha! In what state? You only have to be 18 to be a stripper in every club I’ve been in so far. Same is true for making porn, and that’s throughout the U.S.A.

Alright, ignorance is a valid excuse. Anyway, I’m hanging on for more in this series! You’ve got a good thing going on here.

18 is considered an adult, still a teen, but legally an adult and they can do more things.

As I said before. Fiction town, fiction world, fiction life. Anything is possible here, so everything you know about strip clubs, doesnt apply in Stacie’s world.

okay, let’s see where this goes next.

but realistic fiction is more believable with realistic details, they were just trying to help. Nevertheless it is your story, and your character to name. Fishnet panties sound uncomfortable.. hmm unless it was more of a mesh.. and I like the ending, where she chooses who to woo.

Fishnet panties don’t sound comfortable.
Stacie’s obviously been doing it so long she doesn;t give a shit no more…