Cute little story and a funny moment out of life that felt very real and easy to relate to. To critique, that first sentence seemed unnecessarily long. At the least, maybe a comma after ‘head’?
Critique considered and comma inserted; thanks, Doc. Good to know that it felt real-ish to somebody other than me, I think I was half-asleep when I wrote this.
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