If you’ve got a crazy desire to, you can hear me read it at http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ryE_gjqRn-M

Nice setting. You did a good job of establishing the mood and how it differs from the usual. I especially liked the hostess and bus-boys trying really hard to be busy despite the ominous lull.

agreed with THX, left me wondering what happened though, has an apocalyptic feel, or like going to school on saturday..

You read very well, and the piano, plus the pictures are great. I’m too curious for my own good sometimes.. lol!