I’m a little confused as to where the wind is coming from.. she’s in a sphere, and asleep, and there’s probes, but she hears wind.. And then she dreams no more, was the wind in her dream?

She’s awake. The sound is within the sphere. Maybe the power lines are outside, maybe “they” are playing the sound to her.

The probing is causing her to lose consciousness or pushing her into another plane of consciousness.

I’m guessing I didn’t do too well at conveying… anything at all… in this narrative.

I like this. Your descriptions are great. I could really envision the scene. But it does beg for some explanation. Maybe a prequel or sequel??

You have your prequel

okay second read through, still don’t see that she’s awake, but the stark contrast between the field and things of her dreams and the cold probes is just way too wacky. I’m still lost on the pain.. it was mental anguish?

I reworded slightly to imply that she was still awake. The pain in her abdomen is highly significant to the direction of the story. All I need to do now is work out what it is…

Reworded again, being explicit about her state of consciousness (at least at the start of the piece)

Your juxtapositions are… too deeply disturbing for me, this time.

yeah okay, that’s better. :)