Holy… wow.

This was great, and not just because it was dirty. I love stories that suck me in and make me feel like I know the character. This was one of those. It felt real.

Also, HOT. Real and hot.

Thanks, Silven! Sophia’s challenge inspired me, especially when she invited us to make it dirty. I have to admit, I’m doing a lot of semi-autobiographical working-things-out on here lately… I’m glad others find it interesting!

gripping, gritty, and dirty! Intense scene, and disappointment with the character in the knowledge that just friends is not what she wants, and it cost her the guy.

::sigh:: I love a bit of breakup sex. <3 Bittersweet as the best ones are.

I loved how the rain brought back the memory of the coffee shop. This was well paced.

Phooey, I like the rain and you almost made me not like it! I like the comparison of rain to a buzzing in your head, it’s like some sort of clever reverse metaphor for all the little voices and opinions in our head being muted into background noise while the mind is left alone without answers to the situation immediately facing it.

This is well written and I like how you used the rain throughout. It always is interesting when people keep going on in their relationships when they know it’s over.

I thought this was absolutely excellent! Bravo!