Really enjoyed this story. I like the foreshadowing in the brewing storm and the follow up at the end when the rain starts. Good writing! oh and “Howdy” to you.

This has a narrative song like motion that sways from person to person; telling just enough to hint at the outcome.

Nice job at telling the story without really telling the story. At first I didn’t like the future tense, but by the end it grew on me and really worked for what you were going for.

Nice job at telling the story without really telling the story. At first I didn’t like the future tense, but by the end it grew on me and really worked for what you were going for.

three lives, tied together by the storm. This feels like a prologue to a longer piece. I want to see how they all intermingle..

Who’s to say that haven’t already intermingled? I’m not fond of sequeling my own stuff, because I like each piece I write to be fully self contained. Of course, that doesn’t stop anybody else from doing it, which is fine by me.

Opening 2 paragraphs made me think of a John Prine song I like to sing- “Angel from Montgomery.”

Interesting journey.

I love the narrative voice in this piece and the last line is a wonderful end. This is a very powerful story.