Brutal, and starting to sound like some horrible, future war. Did I catch that right that this individual has a younger sibling at this point.
It’s all neat stuff, and it’s obvious you have a tone bubbling along in your brain. Borders to trying to fit too much in too quickly, but I know how the character limit can do that to you.

yeah i am, and it is evident later on that I just run out of space. sorry!

not sure if I intend the boy to have a younger sibling. oh and at first i was unsure if i wanted the character to be a boy or girl, but i decided the rooms were co-ed, to add to the humiliation.

I thought that the main character was a girl until you called him “he” in a previous comment, but that’s just me, I guess.

Ficly does tend to produce fast-paced stories, I guess it’s an artefact of the format.

Tense stuff… and onwards

I assumed she was a girl, as well, mostly because in the first segment, it seemed as if the whole compound was for women, until you threw a boy in there. Just my two cents.

Is this about WWII? 0.o I’m doing a project on it atm and it seems to be taking that kind of turn.