Okay my dream stopped here.. if anyone has any ideas, go for it..

This all came from a dream? Quite interesting.

Sing to save the government. I remain to be convinced that the government is worth saving.

Intriguing.

Nice! I didn’t realize this all came from a dream. This could go places. I kinda agree with Ethel, though… It looks like the government might not be worth saving.

yeah, i think that’s why the dream stopped! Either than or it would be too much work to plan for a song and dance number?

What an intriguing and epic dream you had there. I had one in seventh grade that’s stuck with me for years; almost wrote it for my NaNo. I really like this series although there are parts that are confusing. I’ll be back tomorrow once I think about it and offer something… right now I’m just really enjoying reading it.

oh i agree that there are huge chunks missing.. dreams go like that.. and maybe one day this will become something greater.. with those chunks filled in.

I like the little jab at the guy obviously concerned with public opinion, as evidenced by his apparel. That was a nice sort of pick-up/description sort of thing, one of those bits of truth that get wound into a narrative and make it ring true.

I’m kind of the action-writer so I say there should be a plot change. I would go on with the play but have the enemy invade at the time so though all the soldiers and people saw the play but it would be to a loss. The takeover attempt would make the country lose territory and put the main character on the other side in a different orphanage for a perspective change. So he/she could decide if her home territory is worth saving.

great idea storm!

Thanks! :D