so these Deepers are alien and kill off those that find out.. and they drool.. ew. I’m kind of like, WHAt was THAT?! because you drop us into a world we soon realize we cannot relate to., this needs a prequel or sequel. :)

I did not follow that at all. No flaw, per se, in the writing of it. I think it’s just a matter of not quite enough context to make sense.

ya.. i re-read it and it needs MORE!!

hehe.. this is just me RE-flexing my creative muscle which has gone un-flexed for more than 2 months!

oh wow. i really didnt see that coming. not one bit. awesome job