nicely done, and in 2nd person, which puts a unique spin in this tale.

Lovely and evocative use of the second person perspective. I really loved the closing lines of that first paragraph.

“Your so Vain” springs to mind but falls short of your beautiful narrative Kaellinn.

I loved the line ‘soft, hazel pools’ and the thirst they induce. A very enjoyable read.
Loves the second person narrative too.

Thanks for the comments, everyone!

Really like this. Mostly due to the fact that even though there is not much outright description of him, as a reader, I feel like I knew this guy already. Knew him, and probably wanted to kick him in the shins, hah.

this was very good but im not even sure what to say about it haha