Wow, DARK! Reads like a rap song.

rofl yeah I know! hahahaha! that’s exactly what it sounds like in my head.. *wipes mirthful tears from eyes

Yeah. WOW. Elsha. Didn’t think you were so deep. Hate to double cross you with your hubby.lol. That seemed to come right from the guts.

Very good story! very well written well done:)

Remind me never to cross you…

I actually read it as a rap, and it was AWESOMEE.

it does sound like a rap. woah elsha, i didnt know you had this in you. haha

OUT OF GENRE, PEOPLE! okay, that sounded threatening.. whoa, maybe you shouldn’t cross me.. i think I need more M&Ms..

Wow. That made me imagine a certain rapper going columbine. If your nto american you probably won’t understand the columbine reference. It felt as if it should be in black and white and in slow motion so you could see the hesitation on the assailants face; see the fear in the lovers eyes. And so on. I can see why he/she left the psycho. XD 5 LAPICES!!!!

Nice flow. You definately can rap, ElshaHawk, whether you want to embrace it or not lol, and spin a good story in there in the process.