This is well written, though you have a couple of typos: “wass” in the first sentence, and “fuled” should be “fueled.” The transition to the last section felt a bit jarring, but I enjoyed your story nonetheless.

I’m with kaellinn18. The last transition is a little jarring, but it’s an intreguing story nonetheless.

Thanks for the feedback… those typos are pretty insane — must have written this pre-coffee :) Am thinking about working with this piece a little more so stay tuned.