Penny Arcade Writer’s Block?

The story is engaging, but the dialogue is a little bit flat.
I am a female with a physics degree and I think we have more colorful language.
I would like to see where the story might lead.

stargazer, I am good friends with many physics types and I am well aware of their awesome vocabularies. I will do what I can to spice this up but I think it’s a case of brushing up against the confines of the Ficly character limit. It may be that I’ll have to make it a regular old short story, good for my blog but not for here, if I want to do female physics majors any justice.

DH, I think I was actually the person from PA who sent you here. I’m Quoth over on the forums. From what I’ve seen, this place has done wonders for your writing and I’m really glad it worked out. :-)