This makes me remember my own wedding day. Thanks for the smile. :-)

Some constructive criticism: you overuse the word “perfect” in this piece, which is all the more noticeable because of its short length. Consider using some synonyms like “flawless,” “immaculate,” and “impeccable.” It helps your story flow better while still getting the same point across.

ok, thanks. i just couldn’t think of another word then perfect.

Maybe a little overdone, this oozes cheesiness. That said, it’s pretty perfect if your non-genre is “Mills & Boon”.

So, it’s either 3 pencils because it’s overdone or 5 pencils because it’s perfect…

well i was trying to focus on how the bride felt that day, and how happy she was.