Oooo, I like this! Especially the last line. Because we all would apologize for something like that if we could. Romantic, but tragic.

I loved this! You should write a prequel about the gunman or the gentlemans view.

whoa,terrifying, but i like it..

You capture the slow motion with your writing beautifully.

Thanks everyone :)

This is beautiful – no other word for it! Loved it! amazing entry!

Makes me think of all the murders you hear on the news that no one seems to care too much about. The way you wrote this makes me care more about them now. Simply flawless.

Very nicely written, the last line perfectly sums up the story and all the feelings it contains. Well done!

Ouch, the last line. That stings. Seriously good job though! I quite liked this. :)

Great build and haunting last line. Kicks it right out of the park!

Painful, and I think you did a good job with the mood, though I can’t say how. It just had this sort of dreamy, out-of-body feel to it.

i agree with THX, very dramatic and dreamy piece.

Not much more to be said, the other comments sum it up.