oh ouch. that was all sweet until the end. now I’m all sad..

Wow, pretty nice dialogue there, with a twist at the end.

I feared that the mother would respond like that as soon as she deflected the kid’s question. Great story, well-written and paced right.

I agree with the others. This is very well done!

like the twist at the end i had a feeling she was going to say that

Great twist. The mom’s a little bitch, but very well done.

Thanks!
The Mom is sort of a bitch…
But being a Mom is hard, and I think everyone has moments of regret.

Nice surprise at the end.

oh wow…this is a winner in my book.

This is reality. And reality is often harsh, not all sweet and lovely like many movies or TV shows would try to make you believe. Then again, you’ve got a lot of mindless shit being made out there too.

laughing

Sorry, ’bout the unnecessary tangent. Your writing is awesome. And I like the mum because she has her responsibility, meets it, and also lives in reality.

that is exactly what I was thinking about when I wrote this.

Ouch, a painful truth there (even if fictitious). Thanks for posting it.

Man, this is so weird. On one hand, I love the concept. On the other, the last sentence seemed a bit too sudden. But back on the first hand, I love the last sentence because of it’s variation on the typical ,“I love you!” I’m gonna go try to settle out which side of my brain should win this one. For now, great job!

Wow, definitely deserving of the feautured spot. I too was expecting her to say what she did after avoiding the questions.

Ouch, the brutal truth of unplanned parenthood. A nice job juxtaposing her tender concern and care and I would assume genuine love with the reality of the regret he embodies.

(I’m too cynical right now to post something nice so I’ll just leave my rating)

I literally said, “Oh. Crap.” aloud when I finished. The relationship with the mother/kid is kind of odd; I’ve never heard of a parent drawing a Batman on a cast or feeling his/her summer was ruined by a kid breaking a leg. But the dialogue is good and the theme is realistic. Good piece.