Aww. I thought the title was going to refer to the doll of the previous story… was amusing to think she just wasn’t a morning person. =)

Well written, but something of a disappointing IT WAS ALL A DREAM come-down after the prequel.

an interesting way to continue the story.

I have to agree with Reverend Speed here. This was well written from a technical standpoint, but since it’s a sequel from a previous story, I feel that the “it was all a dream” angle is a bit of a cop-out.

I think scratch did good taking the story in a different direction, especially since it’s prequel was so fantastical, it would be hard to maintain that unless you’re the original author.

‘It was all a dream’ is a cop out (one of the worst ones really) but this is still a very well written piece. I can feel the main character’s horror on waking, see him in my mind all sweat soaked and freaked out.

That counts for something right? 4 pencils to be exact :)

oh well, I guess no more dream-sequence stories for me anymore…hehehe.

I agree that the dream was a little disappointing…the first part was so exciting and I was sad to see the whole woman-doing-her-bit-as-an-assassin just a man’s fantasy. That annoyed me a bit!
The video game was very interesting and quite true.
I don’t think that people should be let down by the whole dream situation because I intend to rescue it in a sequel if I can imagine one good enough!

Well it’s interesting. And it IS well-written. Yes, it’s also a little bit of a shameless cop-out, but it’s done with bravura and confidence at least. I think it would lift if that last line left it ambiguous whether it was really a dream or not… A dose of last minute ambiguity could rescue this! MH :)