This isn’t part of the challenge. I wrote this for fun so comment as you see fit.

This is an excellent twist on what I originally wrote. I love it! Your dialogue is completely believable, and we’ve gotten a deeper look at two characters who were nothing but set props in my piece. Well done!

Thank you :)

nice sense of dialog.

After writing the Whiteout sequel, my first thought is that Mac shouldn’t have called Donny a pussy.

Nice back-and-forth, continuing kaellinn18’s wonderfully atmospheric concentration on the weather and its effects, something I now realise I totally left out. Shit.

Great notes on the skid, the cell mates, the break-out. I could certainly stand to hear more. =)

nice idea, that they were posing.. very slick.

I do not think I would have liked this as much if I had’ve read it on it’s own without having read the second part first.

That last comment is not a criticism, but emphasises that my enjoyment of it from reading an unexpected opening was major.

You know I like your writing already, but this idea is super!

Thanks everyone, your comments are all so helpful :)

I like the idea but I agree with Scratch in the same positive way concerning the second part.

The weather makes it eery and you never stop mentioning it which is great- I hate it when people mention a storm and the characters aren’t affected at all.

Darling, the title is very intriguing, especially as I assume the police are the ones who locked up the escapees. I am confused, as the sheep seem to have control over the wolves.