This is wonderfully vivid, painting a very descriptive image of a snow bound world. I particularly like the last lines which leave me wondering what exactly is going on here. Who are ‘they’ who haven’t come and why are there toads? Toads that stare no less! A very intriguing piece.

One little typo, I think you meant the black cat ‘skidded’ rather than ‘skidden’.

To spoil the surprise…this was written from real life. My toads were very freaky when i withdrew from the window…they really were staring!

ohhh…all of what thelostgirl said (except the typo, because it was fixed by the time I looked).

Really, your unknowns make the story. Of course, the descriptivity is well done and truly does create a very vivid scene in the mind of the reader, but without the unknown quantities in the story it may very well lead nowhere and be very unsatisfying to read.

I’ll very happily give you a 4 for this..well done indeed!

I think this is a beautiful scene of being shut in on a cold wintry day. The last line is really jarring, though, and doesn’t seem to fit. I think the piece would be better if it were omitted; it doesn’t really add anything.

The last line was merely meant to be an introduction but it shall be omitted if the next commenter agrees,,,

Well. I feel quite disappointed that I never got to see the fabled toads.

Only joking, but I am struggling to even insert toads into this piece in my imagination! Back to the matter at hand, this was impressively written, bucket loads of description and a nice hook for sequels at the end… I found the title really effective as well!

Please, PLEASE, if you have characters, break it up into clearer paragraphs, that’s a pet peeve of mine – but otherwise it does what it says on the tin, very well. MH :)

Reading this I feel warm and snuggly in tones and description. I’m not really sure what’s going on in the story or where it’s going (who are “they”? who is the narrator?), but I feel really good reading this. Like I’m wrapped in a wonderful setting.

“warm blast… caressed my face.” Beautiful line. Great imagery.
Very mysterious, though… I’m intrigued but almost not because I feel like there’s not enough to go on. I mean, if there was more I might be more hooked, wanting to read more. But since short stories are SHORT, I would’ve put more BAM into the end… if that makes any sense at all.
Overall great read.