It’s quite a sad story actually, showing the way that innocence and tradition is worn away with age… Well written :)

She seems like quite a strong-willed character though, not one that would ‘pull down her skirt’ at the slightest mention of ‘action’… Maybe someone else could drop their skirt, and she would be shocked? I don’t know it just doesn’t seem in character…

But well done – it made me think! MH

@ Mostly Harmless – when I said pulled down her skirt, I meant she wanted her skirt to be longer, not that she actually took it off!! Thank you for your kind words

Good that you cleared that up Violet, I was wondering what she was doing!

Otherwise, this was very well written, showing us the innocence of girls at not-so-innocent parties.

Much better… Last line is good enough to deserve another pencil :D

Thank you so much

I agree with MH. It rings true as the story of a loss of innocence. “I invited them. They’re so hot, aren’t they?” That says it all.