I really enjoyed this – some of the description was staggeringly strong – it’s nice to see the variety of entries this challenge is producing.

All I would say is that if you have characters, try breaking the blocks of text up a bit, I think it would lend to the overall feel of the piece – ‘flowing’ doesn’t work so well with such a disjointed, broken setting as this…

Well done! MH

I used the word trousers…for all you yanks that means pants?? I think =D

Also, this is an extract from an unpublished book of mine – so please be aware that it is related to a story.