You’ve set a beautiful scene here. A nice relaxing day on the beach. The ending is really interesting, too; it’s enough to pique the reader’s interest, and it leaves so much room for possibilities.

As for suggestions, “stripped” should be “striped,” and I think that sentence would read better if split by a semicolon with a couple of words added in:

“I stretched my legs before me, settling into my blue and red striped beach chair; Marcel Pagnol’s works, in his own tongue, rested in my hand.”

Other than that, I think this was a finely written piece with interesting options for sequels.

A very vivid piece that creates a sense of warmth during this very cold winter. The ending is very intruging and I’m tempted to sequel but I’ll wait and see where someone else can take this first.

Very well written and wonderfully descriptive.

A lot of commas in the first paragraph which makes it quite long. I’m not complaining because it gives a very relaxed feel to the story in general.

The speech at the end is a little too allatonce. Maybe there should be a break between the name and the rest of the sentence.

I love the description: it’s very detailed and full of fantastic phrases. Looking forward to someone’s sequel.
Until then,
Abby..X

“eagerly devoured” is great imagery. I can relate. Is this beach a real place? I’d love to go there, because how you describe it is breathtaking. Wonderful job on that.

You don’t, or I don’t, usually think of the waves as grey but when you put it like that I can definitely see it…

I don’t see the first comma being necessary either, I hate to say.

I don’t actually have a problem with the long sentences, I kind of like them.

Agree with the last paragraph. Great ending, perfect for adding a sequel. Or prequel. Overall, great work!

I loved this. True, that first comma is a little unneccessary, but the long sentenced add to the luxurious, vivid, splendiferous descriptions you’ve conjured up here… Clever move to give your character a great piece of literature – this is a site for book-lovers after all!

With regards to content I wouldn’t change a thing, but heeding the grammatical advice of those above would help this piece just that little bit more… Doesn’t stop me giving it a 5 though! MH :)

This is really well written. It reads like a part of a longer novel. I’d add a little depth to your description with some noises, or lack thereof. All in all, really nice.

I think a lot of the commenters are reacting to the same impression I got from this story, which is that it’s a fragment and needs more to complete it. It’s a good start, but maybe doesn’t quite have what it takes to stand on its own.