Clicking into this originally, I was painfully worried about the sea of dialogue – but it… Well, it works!

Witty, well-written and subtly character-developing, it works well as a contrast to the highly fantastical descriptions that have characterised the series so far :)

Thankyou and well done on tying up loose ends with aplomb and indeed giving us a few more questions to address in the future… I would suggest capitalising after ellipses , but other than that, a stellar contribution – bravo! MH :)

11 herbs to cure a plague, controlled by the criminal scum of a magical land!

A dying monster that feeds on the innocent, tied to the peace and prosperity of two countries!

A desperate plan hatched by a young ruler, aided and abetted by her fearsome court magician!

Thumbscrews!

…OH, IT’S ON.

A little dismayed by how crawly Therys has become – “a stroke of brilliance on your part” – and more than a little confused half-way through the dialogue… the odd, “said Juno” and positioning, action (straightening clothes as they approach the palace doors, etc) would work wonders for clarity while keeping the pace moving.

That said – 11 Herbs (a few more than I’d have gone for, but hey) for us to construct stories around, introducing a ticking clock over the head of Gorm while keeping him alive… I’m all for this.

Maaan, can’t wait for the next installment. =) Juno or Salindra might be a nice way to ride in on the Denar’s argument with Nyci…

@Rev Speed: A stroke of brilliance on YOUR part would indeed have been a little out of character, but it says OUR, so I think that’s fine… :D

Oh. Oh.

I am apparently blind.

Oooh, thank goodness for some much needed dialogue. This has given the story direction and bulked out the personalities of the character’s even more.

This is great quick fire dialogue, reminds me of Hemingway or Fitzgerald, with the easy back and forth and no ‘he said she said’ to slow it down.

Another wonderful sequel.

Aha…do I see the beginning of a fevered quest across the land, facing many weird creatures, struggling with moral issues and meeting their fathers who then die? Probably not but this is great. You have taken it a good way and although I was terrified about all the dialogue – i was pleasantly surprised with the execution of the piece.

It is an achievement to have no non-dialogue and I think you pull it off.
Well done.

I figured I’d waited too long, and that someone else had sequeled the previous entry; I was correct. However, I definitely like what’s been added! For a piece that is entirely dialogue, this adds a lot to the developing story. The world is really starting to come together. My only qualm with this piece is that it is, indeed, only dialogue. Some actions to wrap the dialogue around would have been nice. Well done, though!

Gorm shall become her pawn! There will be a battle against time as the waiting Denar ambassadors gets antsy over the retrieval of those herbs..

(that’s my prediction)

I know I’m a tad late, but I just wanted to say thanks for the wonderful feedback. As much as I love writing and sharing what I write, reading the comments is my second favorite thing to do on Ficly. Naturally, reading all the other stories is the first. I’m just super psyched that I’ve been able to contribute to this series at all, let alone twice.