Very nice, simple and effective. I don’t know why but the second stanza doesn’t seem to flow quite as nicely as the others – a bit literal perhaps?

Nonetheless, you definitely capture what you’re aiming for, well done… MH :)

because the second stanza doesn’t defend him.

lovesick blu… sticky sweet lovesickness..you’re making my sweet tooth hurt. lol

awe. this is so cute sis. =) i love the emotion.

ill fix the second stanza. thanks for the help… i knew it didnt seem to fit haha

that’s better!

Mhm I thought so

Very cute and very simple…seriously it makes my heart melt
(aaah warm buttery feeling XD)
Love it,
Abby x