I like your story line but I will give a few pieces of advice, 1. write numbers as words (9-nine) 2.Make sure that all your “I’s” are capitalized. 3. Split it up if you want to.
This is a very interesting take on the challenge and is quite emotional and filled with sibling relationship. I like it, Thanks for entering, Abs X
Abby (LoA)
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