A really well written piece here – I like the relationship you’ve developed considering you don’t even name your characters.

Towards the end of the first paragraph you mean ‘no-one’ not ‘know one’, but other than that I can’t see any technical hitches – a good piece, with some nice imagery in that last paragraph – good job! MH :)

black gloves… oil spill clean up team? Great imagery, but lacking in background for this landlocked girl, I must be missing something.