Creepy, with some very strong moments – the first paragraph particularly. Make sure you capitalise after ellipses, and think about appropriate punctuation, for example “I hate you.” automatically reads more powerfully as “I hate you!”… Also, although you might not tell the reader, know in your mind what the thing in the mirror really is – referring to it as a human being doesn’t quite capture what I think you’re getting at… A grisly and great ending here – a bit of a polish and this is a cracking bit of horror, reminds me of the film ‘Mirrors’… Ironically. MH :)

Thanks for the criticism. I wasn’t quite sure what i wanted to do with this story. I actually made a challenge for someone to sequel it :)

hmmm, oh man. Didn’t really expect that. I would really love to sequel this but I don’t know where I’d go with it.

Ah, multiple personality disorder: always a nice characteristic for some suspense. This is very reminiscent of the Niki Sanders character on Heroes. Nicely done!