Hmmm. A nice idea, but it could be a lot stronger.

For starters, that third sentence gives away exactly where you’re going with this and we’ve barely started reading it – let us guess! Build some anticipation!

My issue with the second paragraph is that it’s very rushed. The dialogue doesn’t add much to it, and I think it would be better if you focused instead on some nice descriptions of the wood, and then maybe a little bit of dialogue towards the very end. The wood is a brilliant opportunity to try and emulate Carrol’s style a little, to set the tone! You could even quote him if you can find something relevant…

The more I think about it, the more I want you to think about redrafting to make this the interesting little story it could very well be. MH :)

ominous ending. I watched the same show, I loved it, but I think if I had on a costume, it would have been better :P