MUCH BETTER! My previous comment has been removed, as pretty much everything referenced in it would make no sense to anyone reading your part of the story as it stands now.

This definitely keeps the tone and style of the previous parts of the narrative. I also like how the Denar mage is more serious, as he should be. The one line that could be considered humor is more insulting than anything, which seems to fit his character and the situation. Perhaps he and Therys have some kind of history…

I’m interested to see how the others interpret the herbs helping the Danar nation thrive. I wonder what they could be used for.

Nicely done!

awesome! it’s greathat she showedhm, hand she was so calm, because she knew she had it in her, she is untouchable. Thsi makes you think she let herself be captured to hear this evil scheme.

Damn. Loving. This. Series.

I really like how the mage says the Denar leadership is reliant on the herbs, perhaps they need them more than the Denar people? Also, go Juno for not being some damsel in distress and laying a magical smackdown on old Smarmy Pants.

It’s almost a shame, as I am definitely left wondering what he would have said had he gotten the chance to continue, and that’s wondering in a good way. And how many years has it been since the end of the Great War?

So many stories told, so many left to tell. Anyone thought up a name for this beast?

Excellent. I was hoping someone would remember that Juno has a good handle on magic and more than capable of defending herself.

This is really well written, good descriptions and strong characterisation. Good job.

Love the ‘Court Jester’ jibe at Therys.

I know you’re big on Juno the leading lady rather than Juno the damsel in distress so I thought I’d try and swing it in that direction…! MH :)

Where do we go from here.
I dunno maybe I’ll have another shot.
I loved the last line – juno … bless her.
I’m glad you brought her magic in.
I dunno how I’m gonna deal with Nyci.

Sweet, another story in this series gets featured. Awesome!