PERFECTAMONDO!

A stunning sequel, that really kicks things off… An admirable introduction to a wonderful villain as well – thankyou VERY much! MH :)

This is a dramatic continuation of the original story that is unfortunately marred by a few poorly constructed sentences:

- The “as” in “chuckled as” is unnecessary.

- The period between “desk” and “labelled” should be removed, possibly replaced with a comma.

- The latter half of the second sentence in the letter should probably read, “but when I noticed you strolling in the Great Bazaar…”

I did really enjoy this continuation and would have given it 5/5 if it weren’t for the grammatical errors. This sounds like a fun take on a Mr. and Mrs. Smith type of story.

wonderful sequel!

It continues and continues to get better.
I love the fun of it…very well , but subtly, written =]

I can find no fault in this ficly!!!

I agree with Kaellinn although I would like to start a linguistic argument here and say the FULL STOP should be removed.
PERIOD…tchtch

Nice solution to Rafferty’s supposed death and the opening line makes great use of that well known quote. So well known in fact I can’t remember who said it but never mind :)

Pretty much everything kaellinn said covers the technical critique of this. So I have nothing more to say.

Except well done!

You’ve fit a lot into just one teeny weeny ficly – a feat I am still working to accomplish :P
Very nice plot development :)