I never really feel qualified to comment on poetry, as I’ve said before on other pieces, but I don’t want to rudely ignore such a well-visualised, touching piece.

Technically, I really can’t give you any tips or feedback, but with regards to content and word choice, it flows very well, and has a strong tone which you maintain throughout.

And not so ambiguous that it’s inaccessible, as some poetry can be… Thankyou for this. MH :)

To back up their boasts.
Glasses raised in toast,
False smiles upon their faces
These strongest of the races.
Knowing they have lost.
m not exactly sure why, but I like it.