What an epic last line.

I think ‘revelling’ is spelt with a double ‘l’, and you mean serve at the end of the second stanza?

Apart from that, some more poignant and thought-provoking work – the changing rhyme scheme is interesting, and keeps the poetry fresh – you’ve adapted the structure to what you want to say rather than the other way round, which I appreciate.

Well done! MH :)

Dude I love this. Didn’t you send this to me?

I looked it up before I posted this, reveling seems to be able to be spelled with or without the double “l” and I do not know the difference between them. lol ;)
And yeah Bri I did.

Ah hah! I knew it.