Considering the nature of what’s happened, I don’t know whether Mendez would be quite so calm and collected… It’s quite the freaky crime scene after all!

A good idea though, and well executed in that penultimate paragraph especially – although I think I would have the first sentence of that block as it’s own line, and possibly break the paragraph again at ‘Mills cautiously approached…’, for impact and tension-building really.

Will look forward to seeing where this goes though – well done! MH :)

I picture Julio as being in a state of denial in this opening piece. How does one react when confronted with the impossible? I’m sure it would be different for everyone. Julio is taking solace in the familiar.

First sentence in the last paragraph has been split off. I didn’t think I had characters left to do that, but apparently I did. Thanks for the comments!