Props to Abby for coming up with the term “globberworm!”

Blimey. Incredibly inventive and written with a total grasp of tone and atmosphere… You’re naming automatically helps the presumably fantastical world take shape, and some of your similes are quite daring!

Overall, perfect. I’m actually impressed by how much there is here, the pace is very good. And of course, a tantalising last line. Certainly one of your best K… MH :)

Yeah, I definitely liked this story better than the other one that you commented on earlier. I can actually see this one going somewhere, where The Deal Is On Hold seems more like a standalone scene. Thanks for the comment!

You have captured her terror here so vividly, and also the older sibling’s brush off of the fear, leaving us with a valid reason to be afraid. :)

Ooh, that’s not good. I like the balance from the start to introduce the fears, the dismissal of them as childish, and then bringing back it to them being in real danger.