Such a horrible thing to happen – this actually hurt me to read (but in a good way).
There were a few punctuation errors, like in the first sentence it should have been “my body*,* soothing”
and then in the third paragraph, there’s a sentence without a period.
But overall, amazing story, beautiful writing!

Although I agree with someday_93 about the almost hurtful impact of the story, the character of the girl intrigues me – she grins as she goes downstairs, presumably knowing her father is waiting for her – and she dresses to impress with her revealing dressing gown… Does she enjoy what is happening? Or is she so brainwashed that she thinks what she’s doing is right?

Perhaps I better read on! Good work. MH :)

Impressively scary. I think that there are rather too many “dressing gown”s in the middle section, though.

Daughter getting ready to have sex with her father… interesting.

Um, was I the only one who didn’t think this was sad? I thought it was moving, rather. Incest is not something that I am into, it just doesn’t do it for me, but the challenge was to capture that sort of love. I think this does that. She has a love for her father that we consider unnatural, but in the context of the story and challenge I think it’s quite interesting, to say the least.

Comment for pencils.

I left a more in-depth comment on the sequel to this story (“Not A Kid”) but wanted to come back and rate this one, too. The only reason I’m not giving it a five is because of the technical errors.

I have no problem entertaining the subject matter, and I think you’re doing a bang-up job with it.

The idea of this disgusts me, but you write about it from a very interesting perspective. This was definitely worth reading, great writing.