fog dementor types? fog zombies? still, scary enough for me, I’d run!

Good entry. I like the scary element, of course. Great way to use the fog! I’d be interested to see where this one is going.

That was a horrid visual and moment captured there. The first sentence seemed a bit long, but other than that pretty good.

I love a story that starts with action right out of the gate. You hooked me and I thought visuals you painted were great. I’m excited to see where this one goes.